Roxie Purvines
Tuesday, December 20, 2011
Fahrenheit 451 - Guy Montag: Confused?
Eliminate a few of the 'and's. There are a lot of run--on sentences. Eliminate the word 'etc'. In the sentence beginning with "Also", you need to add a subject in front of the word 'illuminates': she, he, it.
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